Sunday, November 21, 2010

interesting things

We’ve done four fishbowl discussions in class so they all sort of blend together. But one of the more interesting subjects brought up was the parallels between the lobsters’ and our existences. I thought this was a good thought. How everyone is just trying to live their lives and get ahead. We get so wrapped up in life that we forget about death. I don’t think that is necessarily a bad thing. The poem is defiantly stuffed with meaning, but most people thought it was about death, and how we are all slowly dying but not aware of it.
I think the poem is just making fun of us. We are going to die, but won’t for a long time. However most of us aren’t very self aware. I guess it’s easy to go through life without living it.  I don’t like the poem. It’s sort of depressing and although you can get any amount of meaning out of a poem. That doesn’t make the meaning deliberate. That’s what I don’t like about poetry, people can get whatever they want out of a poem, even if it’s not there.

Friday, November 5, 2010

five part paragraph reflection... finally

I am so glad we don’t have to read any more of those stupid paragraphs ….L..I never want to write another one in my life…

We’ve been reading the five part paragraphs for about three weeks. I was sick of them after the first week… I’m sure everyone else was too. One thing I noticed that most people had good topic and conclusion sentences. This is probably because it was the simplest part. About half of all readers had their quotes embedded wrong. Many people either didn’t set out to prove a point or just forgot to stick with it. Many people’s quotes were also too long. Most people didn’t have a problem getting quotes or generating commentary for them.
Focusing on my paragraph, I agree with my 89%. I had a few typos that I found and I think I could’ve made it read smoother. My second quote’s commentary was kind of short, although they were all well imbedded. My conclusion was excellent, like the 29 other papers that were read. My topic sentence was not bad. I did alright, but not great… next time I think I will be able to do a better job. But I won’t like it.  You, Mrs. Gilman have made me passionately hate five-part paragraphs.